Security cover letter critique?
<My name>
<Address>
24th August 2007
Security
<address>
To whom it may concern
Re : Court security
With reference to the above position
As you will see from my enclosed CV
Working as Event Security for <company name> I have on many occasions worked alone and been first port of call to the organisers on events such as the <event name> and the <event name> I have extensive knowledge of handling members of the public. My role as Event Security I took the prerogative to get briefs from organisers that I liaised with and also take the initiative to learn more about the event I was going to be working at to better help with queries that the public might have. Working at night venues I have experience in searching, ejection, confiscation of illicit drugs and handling confrontations. Certified emergency first aid at work I have a good understanding of first aid.
I feel I would be a great asset and the skills and experience I have gained would help me be worthwhile too your company.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I greatly look forward to hearing from you
Yours sincerely
I considering getting rid of the first aid qualification i put in or rewording it better. Also i tried using big words but i think the word prerogative was a bit ott for what i intended. Also i put all the stuff about me and might have come across like im too good for the company. Not really mentioned why id pick this company over others, would this be a problem?
If anyone could help me re-word or shorten the letter or suggest stuff i could add, that would be spanking.
Thanks again
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Professional CV |
Not a bad start but a few developments would improve it. |
|
Lost in Life |
Seems good to me. I'd say submit your resume and cover letter then follow up with the company you wish to work for. If you really enjoy what you do, it should show naturally during the interview. What I've learned is that if you can recount your best job-related experiences in a story-telling manner, you'd likely show yourself as a plausible candidate. |
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Jane |
As this is a court security role- I wonder if you should take a little more time to think about how your events experience will translate to this very different environment- perhaps you need to look again at the requirements for the role and re-word your letter so there is less emphasis on 'events'. Read through the job description etc carefully- and try to highlight the skills, experience and personal strengths you have gained so far that will be needed for this role. |
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